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Green
liquid fire burning down my
throat
twitching, moving against my
pulse
racing with the images in my
mind
scrambled with spots and
shapes
floating in my vision with the
fairy
Dancing, swaying, flickering with the
colors
scrambling together in my
body
filling up with a liquid the color
©2007-2009 =FallingToPieces
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Author's Comments

Okay, if you don't get how the poem works... The odd numbered lines are the end and beginning of the even numbered lines. It's almost like repeating the last word twice. For instance:

Liquid fire burning down my throat. Throat twitching... Get it?

If not then oh well. I like it anyways.

Also, it is not completed because the last word that would be used is the first word used.

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:icontaioralover4ever:
thats really cool i like it

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Watch the rain fall with me. Listen to the thunder. Watch the lightning. It looks so pretty. Now wait for just the right moment and kiss me.
I love you Tony
:iconfallingtopieces:
Thank you :)

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:iconlazulyte:
I love the way this is written....beautiful.

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:iconfallingtopieces:
:hug: thanks!

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:iconblackmoonfaery:
i definitely picked up that it goes in a loop and that the last word is at the beginning of the poem, but i just read it straight and got the meaning anyway. that's pretty hott. love.

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You are my sweetest downfall
I loved you first, I loved you first
Beneath the stars came fallin' on our heads
But they're just old light, they're just old light
Your hair was long when we first met
:icontaioralover4ever:
Your welcome

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Watch the rain fall with me. Listen to the thunder. Watch the lightning. It looks so pretty. Now wait for just the right moment and kiss me.
I love you Tony
:iconfallingtopieces:
Good! But you're smart. Too smart. I think if I'd have read it from someone elses perspective, I'd have failed miserabley in understanding it.

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It's not always about the content. It's about the concept.
:icondreaminstories:
very unique! nice! ^^ :+favlove:

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Why are the penguins eating Fruit Loops on top of the refrigerator? Again? >.<

Actually, how did they get up there in the first place...?
:iconfallingtopieces:
^.^ Thanks!

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