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Pit by =FallingToPieces:iconFallingToPieces:

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I’ve been reaching for a ledge,
something to get a hold onto,
instead of scraping my raw fingers
against this invisible pit I’ve fallen into.

There’s dirt that only I can see,
coating my skin, running clean where
my tears fall.

I’m tired of beating at these walls,
tired of pulling on roots,
only to have them come loose
and fall to the bottom again.

I’m tired of fighting for what I need.
An exhaustion that can’t be slept away.
©2008-2009 =FallingToPieces
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~Shyki:iconShyki: Aug 19, 2008, 9:07:33 PM
Lovely done, mate. You can really see what that person is feeling in this poem.

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And all I could hear was her melodious laughter.
And all I could feel was the whisper of the wind.
And all I could see was an angels smile.
As the heavens painted her wings the color of a rainbow.
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=FallingToPieces:iconFallingToPieces: Aug 19, 2008, 9:19:56 PM
Thanks :)

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~horseygurl258:iconhorseygurl258: Aug 19, 2008, 9:22:33 PM
Wow, straight from the heart.

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"Shoot for the moon; even if you miss, you'll land among the stars." -Les Brown

"Neither love thy life, nor hate; but what thou livest, live well." -Milton
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=FallingToPieces:iconFallingToPieces: Aug 19, 2008, 9:23:31 PM
*nods* Yup.

Thanks for reading.

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It's not always about the content. It's about the concept.
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~horseygurl258:iconhorseygurl258: Aug 19, 2008, 9:38:43 PM
Both of your "Uncensored"s are really good. The deeper side of you, lol. They're very cool.

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"Shoot for the moon; even if you miss, you'll land among the stars." -Les Brown

"Neither love thy life, nor hate; but what thou livest, live well." -Milton
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=FallingToPieces:iconFallingToPieces: Aug 19, 2008, 9:43:04 PM
I have three. Darkness is another Uncensored. That's a haiku though.

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It's not always about the content. It's about the concept.
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~horseygurl258:iconhorseygurl258: Aug 19, 2008, 9:46:39 PM
Yeah I read that one just now. It's a little bit more morbid compared to the others though

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"Shoot for the moon; even if you miss, you'll land among the stars." -Les Brown

"Neither love thy life, nor hate; but what thou livest, live well." -Milton
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=FallingToPieces:iconFallingToPieces: Aug 19, 2008, 9:51:15 PM
Yeah, my lifes not too bright right now :upset:

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It's not always about the content. It's about the concept.
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~horseygurl258:iconhorseygurl258: Aug 20, 2008, 4:25:25 AM
Why? :O_o:

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"Shoot for the moon; even if you miss, you'll land among the stars." -Les Brown

"Neither love thy life, nor hate; but what thou livest, live well." -Milton
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